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In Closing My Eyes by ~iamthesky:iconiamthesky:



In closing my eyes
I remember your smell
And the way your lips felt
When pressed against mine

Only moments ago
But the memory is fading
The image in my head
Already blurred and fractured

Can’t remember your face
Wish I knew your smile
Vague memory of that drawl
Though no words spoken now

In closing my eyes
I fight back tears
Need you again
Before I forget everything
©2006-2009 ~iamthesky
:iconiamthesky:

Author's Comments

I have a new muse.


The line "Already blurred and fractured" is annoying me...it seems clumsy. Suggestions?

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:iconnix0xin:
awwwwwwww

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Fix up, look sharp.
Hereeeeeeeeeeee's Johnny!
:iconiamthesky:
why aww?
thanks for the fave though :glomp:

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Peace. It does not mean to be in a place where there is no noise, trouble or hard work. It means to be in the midst of those things and still be calm in your heart.
:iconnix0xin:
no probs

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Fix up, look sharp.
Hereeeeeeeeeeee's Johnny!
:iconliving-on-a-cloud:
awww :aww:

i like that. i like that very much. *but* shouldnt the "anything" at the end be "everything" because there's already things been forgotten mentioned in the poem. just my two cents worth.

none the less, i like it. :lol:

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<3 Katie
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:iconiamthesky:
hmmm, yes that works better
*changes it*
<3

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Peace. It does not mean to be in a place where there is no noise, trouble or hard work. It means to be in the midst of those things and still be calm in your heart.
:iconliving-on-a-cloud:
ooh, hey, im glad i was of some help.

<3

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<3 Katie
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:iconphoenix316:
Nice one. Very good.

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Don't become so well-adjusted to your culture that you fit into it without even thinking.
Romans 12:2, The Message
:iconiamthesky:
:D

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Peace. It does not mean to be in a place where there is no noise, trouble or hard work. It means to be in the midst of those things and still be calm in your heart.
:iconcrashchick:
I love this! Definate fave from me! :D

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"Smoke me a kipper.....I'll be back for breakfast!" RED DWARF
"Look, that rabbit's got a vicious streak a mile wide. It's a killer!" THE HOLY GRAIL

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